St James School, Aranui, Christchurch

Monday 23rd August 2010

Another constructive session with the group at St James School.

We now have a strong story to work with to use as a basis for the "Growing an Edible Garden" book. I will do some editing on the story this week before our next session on Friday. At the moment the story is too long and we have to add planting, growing and harvesting information and as well as illustrations, diagrams and photographs. This technical information is to be fitted to the fictitious story.

The process of organizing all of the material that needs to go into the book is some thing that we addressed today. Everyone worked on a storyboard for the 16 page book and then we made a dummy. Next Friday we hope to have all the text printed out so that we can do a layout and see what sort of spaces we will have left for the illustrative material. There seems to be plenty to keep all members of the group busy. The children are interested and happy with the project.

With only two sessions to go we still have a lot of work to do but Judy Parry has been doing a lot of work with the group when I'm not there and if she continues this, a good result is likely.

I am hoping that when I finish at the school we will have a finished past-up of the whole book so that it can be scanned and reproduced at a later date.

Gavin Bishop

Feedback from our stories

Last week Gavin Bishop came and  listened to our stories and gave us feedback plus ideas.  He helped each of us with our story that we have been writing about our edible garden.  We are going to publish a book with Gavin Bishop's help. We are now going to  try to put two stories together by two class members Ah li and Timoteo.  

Mr Bishop also shared some stories by Joy Cowley that he is going to illustrate for her.  The stories  were really exciting and fantastic because they had a lot of interesting words and words that rhyme.   It was a real hoot and we had a good laugh. 

Liam and Cecil

A great session where the children enjoyed sharing their stories and getting ideas about how to improve their story.  A lot of the children have realised that they need to look at their flow of ideas and extend ideas when describing a character.

The children will now work on combining two stories together - which will be a very interesting process.

Judy Parry

Room 3

Day 3 St James School, Aranui

Friday 13th, 2010

We had a very positive and constructive session today. Everyone in the group has put of lot of time and commitment into writing a story for us to use as the basis of the book we are planning together. We spent most of the time today listening to the stories. Everyone read their own and I was impressed with how many had put my suggestions from last Monday into place. There was some good discussion about use of language and structure. Everyone was alert to the importance of having a good introduction, a middle and a conclusion. One of the boys could even remember the difference between a story told in 1st or 3rd person.

Then the hard part came. We voted for the story that we thought should be used in the group project. Two stories were chosen and I have left the teacher, Judy Parry, with the task of helping the two writers combine and reduce their texts before I return in a weeks time. The rest of the group are to continue collecting information about planting and growing an edible garden. When I return to St James we should have enough material to start designing the final 16 page book. I will show them how to use a storyboard to organize the text and pictures and then we will transfer the contents into a dummy. This will probably take up most of the last 3 sessions.

Gavin Bishop

Second Visit

Today Mr Bishop listened to our stories and gave each of us some good ideas about what we could do to make them better.   My story is about a man who made a garden and then an alien swapped their garden with his.  The edible garden became a monster and  the man began to fight back but he needed a friend.  His friend was called Jeffro and together they eat the monster which then turns back into the garden.  That is all I have written so far and I am going to finish it before Mr Bishop returns on Friday.

Mr Bishop also showed his storyboard and a dummy book which was really interesting.  

It is great to have an author like Mr Bishop at our school because he gives us ideas about what to write.

From Ah-Li

We had a busy day in the Tutor room on Monday with Gavin where the children shared their stories and began the editing process.  The children have learnt the importance of extending their ideas about characters and revisiting their writing to make sure their ideas flow.

It was a great session and the children look forward to Gavin's visit on Friday.

Judy Parry

Second day at St James School Aranui

9th August 2010 - I spent the 2nd and much more constructive day with the group of young writers at St James School Aranui. Their teacher, Judy Parry, is keen to include a fantasy story about vegetables and gardens into the book that the group is writing about growing an edible garden. I think this is a good idea too. It will lighten the contents and most likely make the final product more interesting to other readers. However, this is creating quite a challenge for the group that I am working with. They have all written stories but most of them wander all over the place and are not very interesting yet. I don't think these children are strong readers so they have very few role models for good story telling or just writing in general. We started todays session with looking at the structure of a story - the beginning, the middle and the end. We agreed that a good story often introduces a character or characters in the first part. A problem or some other incident happens in the second part and the the resolution takes place in the third part. The group spent about an hour writing new stories with this structure in mind. Judy and I moved around the room helping where we could. Some of the children filled a couple of pages in an exercise book very quickly. They seemed to be grabbing ideas from what they could hear being discussed around them. Vegetables having a hard time with monsters and sometimes werewolves cropped up in a lot of stories.

In the second half of the morning I spent time with each member of the group individually. I wrote a list of questions about their stories that they are to thing about and answer before I see them again on Friday.

Gavin Bishop

Gavin Bishop Visit To St James School

On Monday Gavin Bishop began the first session of coaching a group of Room 3 children with their writing. The children were very excited about the visit as over the past two weeks the class had read many of Gavin's books. In pairs they created a diorama that related to a specific book that Gavin had written with a focus on their favourite page from the book. All the children in the group Gavin worked with had also written a creative piece of writing in their individual draft books about the St James edible garden.

The children are now working of gathering research to provide factual information about the edible garden which will be included in the final copy of the book they wish to publish.

It was a great session and the children found it very rewarding.

Judy Parry

Comments from students:

Lita (8 years)

I shared my writing with Mr Bishop who told me the words I used in my story were interesting.

Johnathan (9 years)

Mr Bishop told me to draw pictures that related to the words I had written so that I could communicate my ideas better.

Cecil (9 years)

I learnt about using a 'dummy book' which Mr Bishop uses to write his draft stories before they are published. It was great to meet a real author like Gavin Bishop and learn about how he writes.

ST JAMES, ARANUI 2/8/10 First Session

The students of St James School in Aranui, Christchurch, and I spent our first Creative Coaching Writing session together this morning. After a rousing powhiri in Samoan and Maori the small group of children that I am going to work with over the next few weeks joined me in the library. Today's session was mainly an opportunity to get to know one another and to find out what our expectations are of each other. The main purpose of our time together is to write and design a book on making an edible garden. Most of the students in the school have had experience of doing this and there are some good examples of raised vegetable gardens in the school grounds. Some members of the group have ideas for fantasy stories that involve gardening and we might be able to incorporate one or more of these into our final book. This could be a challenge and might prove to be too difficult but if it is successful it could be an interesting mix.

We finished the session at 12.30pm and I left the group with some research tasks that included finding ways of making compost, ways of sowing seed and finding Samoan and Maori words and beliefs associated with gardening.

We will meet again for another morning session on Monday 9th August.

Gavin Bishop